Writer: Scorpius
Subject: Forbidden Garden
Link: LS666 Email / 14.10.2026
Forbidden Garden
I have read the story ‘Forbidden Garden’ very carefully and with great pleasure; overall, I found it to be a very passionate and exciting read, thanks to its erotic, sadistic and sexual content. Furthermore, the story’s structure, descriptions, and prose reveal great literary skill. For all these reasons, I would like to offer you my warmest congratulations. At the same time, I am sending you a few suggestions in case you incorporate them in the future.
There are three elements worth highlighting: the DVD films watched by the protagonists, the films the protagonists themselves record with their young nieces, and the sexual and sadistic encounters that the protagonists’ relatives have with various young people whilst on holiday in South-East Asia.
About the first element, the DVD recordings from the protagonist’s adult shop could have featured a wider range of actions and characters, further developing the satanic rituals that apparently take place there. These recordings could have served as an initiation for his nieces when they watched them. Given that it can be assumed these recordings were based on real scenes, the level of perversion and depravity would have been at its peak had the images shown multiple scenes of torture inflicted on defenceless victims at various times and under different circumstances.
On the other hand, the relationships maintained by the protagonists with their nieces come as no surprise to them, as we are forewarned of the incestuous relationships they themselves had with their parents. Had this not been the case, the emotional impact on the nieces of the sexual behaviour of the relatives in charge of them would have been traumatic, potentially taking on tragic overtones in their earliest experiences of domination and submission.
Finally, in the last section, the use of torture against the innocent appears for the first time, whether by the whip or through other forms of torment, reaching its peak in the crucifixion of a victim. This final part has yet to be developed, and it will be very interesting to see the nature of the torments and how they are inflicted upon innocent victims in South-East Asia.
I would like to reiterate my congratulations on your work and encourage you to continue writing stories with the intensity and literary flair that characterise your writing.
RESPONSE BY XP
Firstly, thank you for taking the time to share your comments. This was a story I wrote quite some time ago. I remember standing in the subway in New York and secretly admiring her …
“Her simple black jeans were tucked into her worn boots and her black leather jacket sleeves ended just below her knuckles – she was absolutely cute. Her hair was like a wild mane, untamed and free … Their eyes caught each other again as they boarded the train … Shy? Demure? Submissive? She held an unbranded bag tucked under her right arm and held the handrail with the other. He glanced at her small hands and the black nail polish of her shortly cut fingernails. Chris definitely liked her. He wished he had the nerve to say something … The train door opened at the station, and she was gone.”
This part was not fiction. I was Chris on that particular day.
When I write a story, I find that it has a life all of its own. It builds. It changes. It stalls (sometimes). It suggests things to me that maybe I hadn’t considered on the outset. Sometimes, I need to leave it a while and come back to it.
At any one time, I have as many as a dozen stories on the go (at different stages of development). I enjoy the energy and allow the creative process to breathe life into the protagonists and antagonists, scenarios, and the outcome. More art than architecture. Even the choice of words beckons a shift in consciousness.
It’s fiction. Not real. Most of the time. However, as I try my best to be “realistic”, I find sometimes feel that mixing fantasies, dreams, and my love of occult magick makes stories a little more interesting. Surreal rather than just real. It’s not a cop-out, but it just allows me to bend the rules.
I have always identified with the anti-hero. The villain. The bad guy or gurl. I especially enjoy challenging the popular rule that “good” wins over “evil” in the end. In the worlds that I create, I want evil to prevail. Evil must win. And the evil doers vanquish! Thank you again for stirring me to revisit this story. I more recently re-read “Oracle” and “The ShaWoman” — I would be interested to see what you thought of these.